Is this a good beginning?
This is just the beginning of a book i'm writing, but it's not finished yet. prolouge-Emerald eyes On June seventeenth, at exactly the stroke of midnight, a baby girl weighing eight pounds and six ounces, with her feternal twin was born to Michael and America Mendler. Two proud parents, already mother and father to many. Matthew, Maxamillion, Michael, Athena, Arena, Jerimiah and Josphia. The year was 1998 at Edwards Hospital in Naperville, Illinois. Two nurses held uo the twins, side by side, both wrapped in pink. The other twin was asleep, but the other was wide awake. Ger eyes were wide with wonder, her eyes bright and clear, a smile on her gace. Her blanket couldn't restrain her tiny arms and skinny little hands. A small whisp of blond hair was sticking up on her head. Her eyes lashes were black, despite her blond hair. Her skin was a bright shade of ivory, there was no color in her cheeks or the rest of her. The nurses were baffled by the one twin's excited behavior and weir features but relieved by the other twin's normal behavior. One twin would drink formula, the abnormal twin would only drink fat free milk mixed with warm honey. One twin clung to both her parents, the other wanted only her dad. One woke up every hour or so, the other slept through the night. One twins teeth were soft and milky colored, the others were strong and white, adult teeth. They weren't sharp or jagged, like a person might think they'd be. And this child, she was curious, bright, sweet and wild. "What shall you name them?"A nurse asked, passing the demanding, abnormal twin to her father as another passed the normal, sweet little twin to her mother. "I haven't got a clue."Michael said, rocking his baby girl slowly, trying to lull her to sleep, but it didn't work. Failed attempt number....ten? To lull her to sleep. The other twin, the normal twin, was fast asleep in her mothers arms. The mother slowly rocked the baby in her arms, giving the abnormal twins name some thought. She came up with a name when she saw a flower through the window, by a pond. It was a water lily. and it was beautiful. "Lily Belle."America said out loud. The baby girl clapped her hands and squealed in her fathers arms. And then the mother sighed and to her normal baby, "Laurel Whyte." Soon after, the twins were being passed from child to child in the Mendler family. Lily dazzled everyone. But they dazzled her, too. Being dazzled while dazzling. Everyone loved Lily but Lily loved everyone, too. She loved her father the most. Soon after Lily and Laurel were born, at the age of one month, Lily and her family moved to Copenhogden, Denmark. The family lived there for four long years, until a tragedy struck the family. Michael dissapeared one day while fishing on the families boat in the ocean. they moved after a year of searching for him. They set up searches in the near country, Sweden. Also in other countries like, Germany, Switzerland, France. The family soon gave up and America moved everyone to Kansas where they started a farm. The other's didn't like to work, but Lily did. Working up from feeding chickens, to brushing and taking horses, to repainting fences and mailboxes and picking and planting in the garden. When Lily reached the age of twelve, another tragedy struck her life. Her mother died in a car crash with her friends parents. Flatt Quenn, Jeliah Mixx, Jazmin Young, Cedric Yorkk and his baby sister, Rukai Yorkk were also left parentless. But let's begin this story on June seventeen, five thirty in the morning. Was that a good beginning? leave answers to let me know!
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Wow it's totally a good beginning! But i think you should do it the way you like it... I'm writing myself a book, I'm 14 years old, and it doesn't looks even a little bit like this opening you have there. It's a great introduction for what's about to happen. Quite interesting i should say. Good luck with that book of yours and keep on it, I think it's going to be really good.
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It's a really interesting idea but right away I'm curious about why the parents have so many children. It might get confusing to tell them all apart later. You could edit the first two sentences together. For instance (and I don't think you need 'exactly') Also, are both twins girls? You mean fraternal. No need to mention the weight unless it's a detail that will come out later. Too much description bogs it down. 'On June 17, 1998 at the stroke of midnight, fraternal baby girls were born to Michael and America Mendler. (any reason the reader needs to know the name of the hospital?) Two nurses held the twins side by side, both wrapped in pink. One (the other and the other?) was asleep, but the other was wide awake with eyes full of wonder (newborn babies can't smile, sorry.) A small whisp of blond hair was sticking up on her head although her lashes were black. (bright shade of ivory? Consider revising. It doesn't make sense) At this point I think you should name the twins so when you refer from one to the other the reader will know who you mean. If this is 1998, don't say 'shall.' It's old fashioned. Edit all the stuff describing them way down and *please* don't use the word dazzling over and over. I had a Twilight flashback. Not good. Tell the story in as few words as possible. For instance When they were one month old, the family moved to Copenhogden, Denmark. Simple. Then you flash forward four years, so that seems to happen too fast and then they move again. It's confusing. One move is enough. Then Lily is twelve? slow it down a little. Then there's another tragedy and then you say 'let's begin?' The Mom dying seems like overkill and the story's already begun so you don't need that. Keep working on it and good luck!
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Wednesday, November 28, 2012
Wednesday, November 14, 2012
Verena or Evanthia? Too strange for you
Verena or Evanthia? Too strange for you?
Name: Evanthia Gender: Feminine Origin: Greek Meaning: Blossoming Flower Name: Verena Gender: Feminine Origin: German, Late Roman Possibly related to Latin verus "true". Saint Verena was a 3rd-century Egyptian-born nurse who went with the Theban Legion to Switzerland. After the legion was massacred she settled near Zurich. Would anyone feel more comfortable with Isabelle or Claire? Something safe?
Baby Names - 11 Answers
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I liek Verena. The other doesn't seem very appealing. Sounds like you're trying too hard to sound original. Like naming your kid Apple.
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Don't really like Verena, but I think Evanthia is really pretty!
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Verena sounds like a woman's sanitary product. Evanthia sounds like the name an investment group might give itself. Verena is quite nice though.
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I like the sound of verana better , but I don't like either really
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weird <_<
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Verena sounds alright; kind of like Serena with a V. I don't care for Evanthia at all. It just isn't my style. I don't find it to be a pretty name at all. So I suppose I'd go with Verena, but I'm not loving either one to be honest.
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I like Evanthia! It's unique. Verena sounds like a medical condition.
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They are both so pretty! :) Verena is nice, similar to Serena, which makes it look normal, but not over the top. I cannot get over how beautiful the name Evanthia is, but it's a bit "too out there".
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well, Verena sounds better to me. Claire and Isabelle are both beautiful names!
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I like unusual names and think both are very pretty. To me safe names can sometimes, and I do mean only sometimes, be boring. Evanthia is my favorite of the two.
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I like them both better than Isabelle. But Claire is one of my favorites for a middle name.
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Name: Evanthia Gender: Feminine Origin: Greek Meaning: Blossoming Flower Name: Verena Gender: Feminine Origin: German, Late Roman Possibly related to Latin verus "true". Saint Verena was a 3rd-century Egyptian-born nurse who went with the Theban Legion to Switzerland. After the legion was massacred she settled near Zurich. Would anyone feel more comfortable with Isabelle or Claire? Something safe?
Baby Names - 11 Answers
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I liek Verena. The other doesn't seem very appealing. Sounds like you're trying too hard to sound original. Like naming your kid Apple.
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Don't really like Verena, but I think Evanthia is really pretty!
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Verena sounds like a woman's sanitary product. Evanthia sounds like the name an investment group might give itself. Verena is quite nice though.
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I like the sound of verana better , but I don't like either really
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weird <_<
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Verena sounds alright; kind of like Serena with a V. I don't care for Evanthia at all. It just isn't my style. I don't find it to be a pretty name at all. So I suppose I'd go with Verena, but I'm not loving either one to be honest.
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I like Evanthia! It's unique. Verena sounds like a medical condition.
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They are both so pretty! :) Verena is nice, similar to Serena, which makes it look normal, but not over the top. I cannot get over how beautiful the name Evanthia is, but it's a bit "too out there".
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well, Verena sounds better to me. Claire and Isabelle are both beautiful names!
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I like unusual names and think both are very pretty. To me safe names can sometimes, and I do mean only sometimes, be boring. Evanthia is my favorite of the two.
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I like them both better than Isabelle. But Claire is one of my favorites for a middle name.
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Wednesday, November 7, 2012
please help me choose a career
please help me choose a career?
i'm an indian girl,would like to go abroad so it will be good if the career have possibilities in us, uk,switzerland,ireland etc no nurses please i'm interested in biology.please reply fast so i can choose my course thanx to everyone who helped me
Other - Careers & Employment - 6 Answers
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Prostitute. So much money.
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A Biologist lol. no, seriously, if your intereste in biology why not?
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Anything in the health care field would be good. How about a lab tech?
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you can take up research
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doctor...maybe...
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Hey, I'm from Australia (16 years old) and in the future wish to do a Bachelor of Science specializing in the environment or geology. I recently did work experience at Beverly uranium mine and traveled around the mine with the Senior Mine Environmentalist and senior geologist. It was great, they had such a varied jobs which included making sure the miners stick to the environmental guidelines, making sure the uranium did not affect the biodiversity, examining core samples and so much more. I highly recommend entering the mineral industry which can give you the opportunity to travel the world. Australian is crying out for environmentalists and geologists due to its massive mining boom. Throughout the world there are hundreds of mines therefore there are always jobs which allows you to travel and do your best to reduce the consequences of mining on the local biodiversity and find massive ore deposits. GEOLOGIST: Salary: Graduate: AUD $70K. Senior: $120k + ENVIRONMENTALIST: Salary: Graduate AUD $50K Senior: $80k + My dad mangages a Major uranium mine in south australia and only seeks people who have tickets or previous experience. cheers
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i'm an indian girl,would like to go abroad so it will be good if the career have possibilities in us, uk,switzerland,ireland etc no nurses please i'm interested in biology.please reply fast so i can choose my course thanx to everyone who helped me
Other - Careers & Employment - 6 Answers
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Prostitute. So much money.
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A Biologist lol. no, seriously, if your intereste in biology why not?
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Anything in the health care field would be good. How about a lab tech?
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you can take up research
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doctor...maybe...
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Hey, I'm from Australia (16 years old) and in the future wish to do a Bachelor of Science specializing in the environment or geology. I recently did work experience at Beverly uranium mine and traveled around the mine with the Senior Mine Environmentalist and senior geologist. It was great, they had such a varied jobs which included making sure the miners stick to the environmental guidelines, making sure the uranium did not affect the biodiversity, examining core samples and so much more. I highly recommend entering the mineral industry which can give you the opportunity to travel the world. Australian is crying out for environmentalists and geologists due to its massive mining boom. Throughout the world there are hundreds of mines therefore there are always jobs which allows you to travel and do your best to reduce the consequences of mining on the local biodiversity and find massive ore deposits. GEOLOGIST: Salary: Graduate: AUD $70K. Senior: $120k + ENVIRONMENTALIST: Salary: Graduate AUD $50K Senior: $80k + My dad mangages a Major uranium mine in south australia and only seeks people who have tickets or previous experience. cheers
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Thursday, November 1, 2012
If the UK is right-wing, why does it have such a comprehensive health care system
If the UK is right-wing, why does it have such a comprehensive health care system?
The UK government owns every bit of the health care system, nothing is private. It owns the hospitals, it owns the ambulance services, all the nurses, doctors, paramedics, ward staff are all government employees. There is pretty much no privatization anywhere in the NHS system. This is in contrast to Japan, Switzerland and Canada where most of their hospitals and doctors are private, and the government just subsidize the cost, rather than actually owning the system itself. The UK government covers 82% of health care costs, whereas in Canada only 69% of the costs are covered, and in Australia 67% of the costs are covered. The UK system seems to be the ultimate socalist system. Nothing right-wing about it.
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The UK hasn't been right-wing since WW2. The UK is a center-left social democracy.
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There is some privatization in the NHS. Anyway, what is left or right wing in one country is not necessarily left or right wing in another.
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I do not really know any specifics about the UK and how the country is run, however...... It is very possible to have a socialist economic system, and be very socially conservative.
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Stark contrast to Canada? I think you are lost or something.
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that was before the new government (I'm worried about having to pay 31% in Canada, I haven't paid anything in the last 40 years, will they show up with a huge bill one day?)
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The U.K is becoming islamic theocracy that will arrest people for burning korans while violent muslim gangs dominate their streets. Not to mention they are busy building the biggest mosque is the world in London etc..
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That's the idea (and problem) of the NHS. The public own everything. Unfortunately this is often just an excuse to employ millions of paper pushers who really don't fill any function other than to be expensive office-fillers, creating bureaucracy for each other. The idea of it was to create a state-owned healthcare provider whose services would be free at the point of need, so you don't get a scene like you get in American hospitals when people with their guts spilling out all over the place are searching for their credit cards or are on the phone to their bank manager frantically re-mortgaging their house. That's not to say that there isn't private healthcare in the UK. Ironically one of the largest private healthcare organisations in the world, BUPA, is very prevalent in the healthcare industry. And you can't take the NHS as being the bellwether for the British nation in general. Within the market capitalist economy and the shrinking state, the NHS is something of an anachronism nowadays.
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UK is not center right, it is closer to Socialism than even center. @Grandad: You did it again, you make false assertions about America, perhaps you watch too many celebrity journalists instead of doing your own research. No American can be turned away from an emergency room, whether they can pay or not, Also, many use the emergency room as their family doctor, they go when they have the sniffles, they cannot be turned away. You are prone to the dramatic (spilled guts) Let me tell you some English people who can pay the fare here choose to come for the best attention. I am beginning to see a pattern in your vitriol, envy. One of these days you will get your information right.
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The UK government owns every bit of the health care system, nothing is private. It owns the hospitals, it owns the ambulance services, all the nurses, doctors, paramedics, ward staff are all government employees. There is pretty much no privatization anywhere in the NHS system. This is in contrast to Japan, Switzerland and Canada where most of their hospitals and doctors are private, and the government just subsidize the cost, rather than actually owning the system itself. The UK government covers 82% of health care costs, whereas in Canada only 69% of the costs are covered, and in Australia 67% of the costs are covered. The UK system seems to be the ultimate socalist system. Nothing right-wing about it.
Politics - 8 Answers
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The UK hasn't been right-wing since WW2. The UK is a center-left social democracy.
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There is some privatization in the NHS. Anyway, what is left or right wing in one country is not necessarily left or right wing in another.
3 :
I do not really know any specifics about the UK and how the country is run, however...... It is very possible to have a socialist economic system, and be very socially conservative.
4 :
Stark contrast to Canada? I think you are lost or something.
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that was before the new government (I'm worried about having to pay 31% in Canada, I haven't paid anything in the last 40 years, will they show up with a huge bill one day?)
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The U.K is becoming islamic theocracy that will arrest people for burning korans while violent muslim gangs dominate their streets. Not to mention they are busy building the biggest mosque is the world in London etc..
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That's the idea (and problem) of the NHS. The public own everything. Unfortunately this is often just an excuse to employ millions of paper pushers who really don't fill any function other than to be expensive office-fillers, creating bureaucracy for each other. The idea of it was to create a state-owned healthcare provider whose services would be free at the point of need, so you don't get a scene like you get in American hospitals when people with their guts spilling out all over the place are searching for their credit cards or are on the phone to their bank manager frantically re-mortgaging their house. That's not to say that there isn't private healthcare in the UK. Ironically one of the largest private healthcare organisations in the world, BUPA, is very prevalent in the healthcare industry. And you can't take the NHS as being the bellwether for the British nation in general. Within the market capitalist economy and the shrinking state, the NHS is something of an anachronism nowadays.
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UK is not center right, it is closer to Socialism than even center. @Grandad: You did it again, you make false assertions about America, perhaps you watch too many celebrity journalists instead of doing your own research. No American can be turned away from an emergency room, whether they can pay or not, Also, many use the emergency room as their family doctor, they go when they have the sniffles, they cannot be turned away. You are prone to the dramatic (spilled guts) Let me tell you some English people who can pay the fare here choose to come for the best attention. I am beginning to see a pattern in your vitriol, envy. One of these days you will get your information right.
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